ACT寫作滿分秘笈

　2015年9月，ACT寫作部分的改革正式推行，這次的改革主要體現(xiàn)在以下三個方面：時間上從30分鐘變成了40分鐘;命題方面，觀點(diǎn)由兩個變成了三個;分?jǐn)?shù)則由12分變成了36分。除了給出總分，還有四個分值在2-12分的寫作單項(xiàng)分，分別體現(xiàn)考生在觀點(diǎn)和分析、展開和論證、文章結(jié)構(gòu)以及語言應(yīng)用方面的能力。

　　接下來，楊老師將為大家分析給出的樣題及滿分范文，以幫助考生更好地適應(yīng)新的作文題型，爭取考出理想的分?jǐn)?shù)。

　　通過上圖，我們可以看出，在新版寫作中，命題人給出了三種觀點(diǎn)，一定要注意：考生不但要有自己的立場，還要對給出的三個觀點(diǎn)進(jìn)行一一評價?？忌o出的立場可以和任何一個perspective相同，不完全相同或者和所有perspective都不同，但是切記，一定要將自己的觀點(diǎn)與所給的觀點(diǎn)一一聯(lián)系起來，并予以分析。對于和自己立場相同的觀點(diǎn)，只需要論證其合理性即可。這在一定程度上束縛了臨場發(fā)揮的自由，但是也擴(kuò)展了考生的思路，考生只要做到自圓其說就行了。

　　下面是一篇滿分范文，并附上楊老師的解析，請同學(xué)們仔細(xì)閱讀一下，相信大家定會有所收獲。

　　[1]As technology improves, and more and more tasks arecompleted by machines instead of humans, the question is no longer about whatwe can do with machines, but rather what we should. [2]Although the usage of machines increasesefficiency and our standard of living, it detracts from the value of human life.

　　本段是文章的Introduction部分，第[1]句從當(dāng)前社會現(xiàn)象入手，提出本文要探討的問題，第[2]句使用一個讓步狀語從句，although部分置于前端，巧妙地對應(yīng)了文章主體段的第*部分，并且辯證地提出個人觀點(diǎn)(thesis statement)，可謂是言簡意賅。

　　[1]As machines increasingly perform all our basic tasks, society is ableto produce more. [2]The additional production adds material valueto our society and frees people up from these low-skill tasks. [3]This is in agreement with Perspective Two which claims that this industrialization leads tomore prosperity. [4]For example,in the 18th century, short-staple cotton that was grown in the Southern UnitedStates required an immense amount of labor in order to separate the seeds fromthe fiber to process the cotton to make it marketable. [5]However,in the mid-19th century, Eli Whitney, an American entrepreneur, invented thecotton gin, which allowed for automation of cotton processing. [6]This machine replaced the need of a large workforce for the process and greatly improved production. [7]Asa result of the cotton gin, short-staple cotton production skyrocketed,increasing by more than 10 times in the South while bringing prosperity to theregion and setting in motion a new industrial era in America. [8]This is in agreement with Perspective Three, which says that mechanization allows for“unimagined possibilities”. [9]Although there are clearly many advantages toindustrialization, there are also some heavy drawbacks.

　　本段是主體段第*部分，第[1]句是topic sentence，照應(yīng)本文thesis statement的“Although theusage of machines increases efficiency and our standard of living”，第[3]和[8]句分別闡述了與命題中觀點(diǎn)二和觀點(diǎn)三的邏輯關(guān)系，并輔以例證(第[4]到[7]句)。本段結(jié)尾處第[9]句是一過渡句，承上啟下，使得文章結(jié)構(gòu)極為嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)。

　　[1]The replacement of humans by machines leads to the loss of value tohuman life, an effect that outweighs the material gains of automation. [2]The search to findhuman tasks that can be performed by machines inevitably leads to comparisonetween the human and the machine. [3]If acompany executive wants to see if an inventory management team can be replacedby a robotic system, he will compare the two and determine which can do abetter job. [4]When this occurs, the peopleon the team are evaluated not for their worth as human beings, but for theireffectiveness at performing a specific function—in essence, as we wouldevaluate a machine. [5]In a larger sense,when we begin to think about humans in this way, the worth of a person’s lifebecomes dependent on only what they can do and no longer has any intrinsicvalue. [6]As Perspective Onestates, we begin to lose our humanity. [7]Thisnew mindset and way of evaluating people, though seemingly harmless in theworkplace, is devastating when it begins to pervade a society. [8]If a person is judged only on his or hercapability, there is no reason for a person to remain after they have servedtheir function. [9]This would warrantgenocide against the elderly and the disabled because their burden on societywould not be made up for by any production. [10]Althoughthe machines may seem to only fulfill the low skill jobs at the moment, thereis no barrier to prevent the machines from replacing more. [11]As the machinesincrease in intelligence, they will replace any tasks done by humans and renderus unnecessary and worthless.

　　本段是主體段第二部分，第[1]句是topic sentence，照應(yīng)本文thesis statement的“it detractsfrom the value of human life”，第[6]句闡述了與命題中觀點(diǎn)一的邏輯關(guān)系，進(jìn)一步明確個人觀點(diǎn)。本段中雖然沒有像第*部分那樣給出具體的例證，但是使用了推理性論證的手法，倒也能自圓其說。(例證的時候，建議大家使用具體的例證，說服力會更強(qiáng)一些)本段結(jié)尾處第[11]句是小結(jié)，既照應(yīng)了本段開頭，又讓主題顯得更加鮮明。

　　Due to the risks of dehumanization, the materialbenefits of machines are not enough to justify its increasing presence.

　　文章Conclusion部分短小精悍，與Introduction遙相呼應(yīng)，進(jìn)一步深化了主題，為文章畫了一個圓滿的句號。

　　綜上所述，此文采用了四段式的總分總結(jié)構(gòu)，自然而然地提出問題、分析問題、解決問題。用詞精準(zhǔn)、句式靈活、結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)、論證有力，滿分當(dāng)之無愧。希望同學(xué)們能夠仔細(xì)品讀，吸取精華。